They collapsed into the sand
Their faces turned up against the breeze
Their laughter ringing in the air
Casting a spell across that silent night
The lone boat cracked right down the middle
A mute witness to their chatter
With only the beam of the lighthouse casting a warm glow
While they drew circles in the sand
They had given up building castles in the air
Long ago when time dealt them a cruel blow
Now they were stronger and could swim against the tide
And yet between them was a great divide
The future lies ahead of them
As vast an expanse as the sea's horizon
They walk barefooted towards the water
Holding hands as they were always used to
They look around at all the jewels cast ashore
And promise to build a foundation for the future
At last their eyes shone in the moonlight
A meaningful purpose was finally in sight
27 comments:
Funny how the verses flow during the wee hours of the morning, eh?
Really pleasant reading. I liked these lines a lot:
The lone boat cracked right down the middle
A mute witness to their chatter
Do keep writing!
Loved the verse and this para in particular...
The future lies ahead of them
As vast an expanse as the sea's horizon
They walk barefooted towards the water
Holding hands as they were always used to
and ofcourse the best part was the title ;)
wow! nice!
Oye! Ye khud likha? WOW! Khud likha? :O Chhupa hua talent phudak phudak ke bahar aa raha hai, Lady!
yea tht glitter thingy is awesome na!!! and high five that u got it too!! :D
achha sun, once u get the code - click on template - then u'll c html code of ur template - waha pe, search for words like "title" or "blog title" or "heading 1" or "main heading" (me givin so many options cuz ur template mite b using a dfrnt name in ur html code) - once u get that, remove the existing code (boring blogger ka code) and paste yeh glitter wala code!
then u too can go glitter!!! :D and we can form "The gliteratti Club" :D
#Sandeep,
Yes! Inspiration comes at odd hours :-) The lines you mentioned are some of my fave too.
#Bev,
Thank you and yes, the title is the icing on the cake ;-) glad you got it too! :D
#ZZTop,
Thankees girlie.
#Rohit,
Oye! Aur kaun, meri naaniamma likhegi kya! Like Nirwa says, apun ko insulate mat kar, nahi toh....:D
Actually even I am not used to churning stuff out like this that often, blogging seems to be opening up new avenues even for me, to me!
#SnS,
Club ka idea achcha hai :D I tried but it ain't workin' yet, yaar :-(
Ur lines reminds me of something I made up a long time back...
My Lifes' just like the beach.
Abrasions washed away like marks on sand.
Beauties stay firm as rocks on shore!
Times' the wave that hits the shore.
Abrasions destined to be washed away.
The beauty withins' what stays!
I really am not in a position to judge where my poetic talent, if @all theres' one stands.
Hey what u wrote are really nice lines...
dumbfounded re. too mach! too mach! keep them coming, t.c.o, i see the makings of kav..er.. i meant (Somegreatpoetesss) in here. ;)
and yes, i think title was the best part too!
i also went and read calmoflage..you're good!
#Koutilya,
Nice lines there too and thanks:-)
#TGFI,
Dumbfounded and just plain dumb is what you will be if you dare compare me to the notorious Kaavyawoteva! *plots evilly about planting a virus in your dissertation file* Muahahahaha! Oh...i see you paid me some compliments...hmmm...maybe just a teeny-weeny harmless li'l bug then? :D
Nice verses. Becomes more interesting when you read only the odd lines leaving out the even lines. The mood towards the end changes slightly.
Very very nice indeed! Good job, tco - reclaiming you as my twin lost in the kumbh ka mela! :)
#Arrowhead,
Thanks, I realised the lines were sinking into despair like quick sand and salvaged it in the last para :D
#Gemini,
Very very many thankyoos, behena! Now that we are back to being sisters, can I raid your neat closet? :D
oye aunty ?!! which side of whose bed did you get up from ?
:D
WOW !! good ones yaar !!
the lines,i mean..
:P
#Kini Mamu,
//which side of whose bed did you get up from?//
zat is my bizness wonly!!! :P
WOW Jane..
That was awesome :)
Left me speechless!!!
Perfect title too!
Nothing much to say since I said your poem made me speechless :)
Keep writing..
Take care,
Aarti
Ah! I am waiting for more. :)
Aur...err...agar sachchi main Naaniama ne likha hai...to charan-sparsh.
:D
#Aarti,
:O [I'm doing the Ms Universe act here :-D] Oh, and thank you!
#Rohit,
Naaniamma kehti hain ki charan sparsh toh theek hai, sau saal tak jeeyo aur sau bachche paidha karo! Le beta, aur chawanpraash kha lo!
:-D
Whoaaa...it's SOME refreshing reading at 6:30 in the morning! Brilliant!
The future lies ahead of them
As vast an expanse as the sea's horizon
Those are lovely lines. :) It's been a long time since I read meaningful poetry by some normal person...I mean, not the usual, regular, English book poets. ;)
too good!!!
"Now they were stronger and could swim against the tide
And yet between them was a great divide"
abe i replied to ur mail; gave u hajaar other options to find in ur html code; nahi mila woh mail?? chk chk... aur kuch prob ho to send me the code; i'll do and give it for u :)
#The girl,
6.30am and you're on blogworld! :P Thanks, also for calling me normal :D
#Neihal,
Danke, me likes those lines too. There's a lot of meaning to them.
#SnS,
Got your reply four days ago, sorry, hadn't seen it until today!
SAU BACHCHE?! *gasps*
Naaniamma se bolo...sara aashirwaad mujhe hi de diya kya? :O
hullo medam.
itna sundar kavita jo likh liya..bus kya? update wupdate ka koi iraada?
#Rohit & TGFI,
Ok, your comments were about two different things, but I'm too lazy to reply separately :D
As for update...hmm...humein kuch "inspiration" ki zaroorat hai...ek minute...hum kuch 'kurkure' ke packets dhoondh rahi hain :D :D :D
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